The weekend is upon us, pasta fans! This week I'm going to be looking at one of the more recently submitted stories, of the strange and unknown variety. This was one of the micropastas submitted this month.
Darkness in the Rear View Mirror
Genre: Strange & Unknown
Author: Anonymous
Reading Time: 2 minutes
Synopsis: Driving alone is relaxing for some... terrifying for others.
Creepiness
(How Scary)
Pasta Quality
(How Well Written)
I understand the difficulties that come with short story writing, but this pasta seemed to have the opposite problem; instead of not having enough detail, it doomed itself with too much of the wrong kind. The idea is actually pretty interesting, once I understood what was going on (that something huge was clinging to the back of the car), but like someone pointed out in the comments, it took the narrator months to even connect the marks on the car to what they could have meant. The solution seems simple enough; connect that night with creepy things happening in the house or imply malicious intent, like that the creature was trying to make the driver wreck. Or some subtle trace that the creature is still there...
I found a narrated video version of this story, and it's interesting how much different of an experience reading it is from hearing it read to you. The narrator's deep, serious voice highlights the areas of the story that sound like a teenager's diary. Not even the tone setting background piano keys can save it from sounding silly.
Unless it is rewritten, this is definitely a story that should be read silently.
-Huntress
I found a narrated video version of this story, and it's interesting how much different of an experience reading it is from hearing it read to you. The narrator's deep, serious voice highlights the areas of the story that sound like a teenager's diary. Not even the tone setting background piano keys can save it from sounding silly.
Unless it is rewritten, this is definitely a story that should be read silently.
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